Across The Way Thread #15190
Eternal Star- Daniela's First Poem About River
Created ByDani The Girl
Created DateMon, Nov 03, 2003
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Dani The GirlSubjectEternal Star- Daniela's First Poem About River
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Okay this is really hard for me but I want to do it. I wrote this
poem for River last year and it means a lot to me. We were studying
John Keats at the time, and if any of you have studied him, that some
scary stuff! He was a lot like River. I would actually be crying in
class studying him because I was so moved. I don't like to show
myself creatively unless I have to, but everyone else shares here.
Don't feel like you HAVE to give feedback. I just thought it should
be out there. It basically shows the way River changed as a person.
It could be sort of hard to understand, because the assignment was to
write a sonnet, and I had to compress it all together. The lines 2-4
are supposed to be "the star's" words, which can be sort of unclear.
Otay. LoL. I'm just nervous.

Eternal Star

The rising star flies, yet before we blink,
“Awake! Dormant compassion in your heart,
For you hope does ling’r although you think,
You are the one destined to break apart.”

The dimming star sighs, all his words are lost.
Let me hold you to bring your spirit back.
Those thoughts of wisdom all forever lost?
You gave the world purity it did lack.

The falling star lies tremb’ling on cold ground.
Don’t close your eyes- but stay alive for me!
No one can hear your cries above the sounds.
You are the heart of all that life can be.

The constant star dies, river 's at the end.
Ask if you could possibly bring a friend.

-Daniela Hummel.

Thanks guys!
Love ya!
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LakotaSubjectRe: Eternal Star- Daniela's First Poem About River
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Daniela,
I really loved your poem, as well as, your writing style. Thanks
for letting us read it and please keep writing.
Shea -
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RachelSubjectRe: Eternal Star- Daniela's First Poem About River
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Daniela I loved your poem, when I was reading it I felt a whole
range of emotions, which I love. I love when a poem can show
something in a new light. I know how nerveracking it can be to post
your own poems on here but I'm so glad you did.

"You gave the world purity it did lack".

I love that line because it's so true.

Thanks again love Rachel
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Lil* Sis71SubjectRe: Eternal Star- Daniela's First Poem About River
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Hi Daniela!!

holy cow! I keep reading this over and over. I really love it.
I hope you will share more of your work. i especially like the line
" you gave the world the purity it did lack."
thank you so much for posting this. I think it's wonderful

love,
Shirl
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LakotaSubjectRe: Eternal Star- Daniela's First Poem About River
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This is really a great poem Daniela, and your style is unique.
Thanks for letting us read it, don't let it be your last.
Shea -
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